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Some people believe the purpose of prison is to punish, while other would argue that rehabilitation is its primary role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 argue that the prime object of
prison
 is punishment while others say the main motive is rehabilitation.
This
 essay agrees that the reason for
prison
 is punishment.
This
 essay will discuss both points of view On one hand , rehabilitation is
a
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the
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 action of restoring someone from former privileges. Some
people
 are sentenced to jail for their whole life while others, serving the time of their punishment for minor crimes.
For instance
, a
twenty - three-year-old
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twenty-three-year-old
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 woman who was previously jailed for shoplifting, was caught by security at the showroom trying to shoplift a Rolex watch .
This
 proves that
prison
 is not the best option to rehabilitate themself
On the other hand
, there are
people
 present in the society who has committed
hideous
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 crime
such
 as rape , murder, child abuse,
asulting
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resulting
 etc. These criminals should not be released from jail because they will try to commit
such
 crimes again and
prison
 will just be a vacation for them . To illustrate , a twenty-year-old local gangster who has committed various dangaoures crime has been to jail several times but
still
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 it does not stop him from going on the wrong path or repeating the same felony.
However
, the
goverment
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government
 should punish
this
 criminal it will not make society safe but
also
 create an example for the youngsters about the consequences of going on a wrong path In conclusion, Some
people
 deserve a
second
 chance and
prison
 can be rehabilitation for them. ,
However
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 I believe that the key agenda of
prison
 should be punishing
people
 for the dangerous crime they have committed
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