Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is believed by some that
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homeschooling

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is the best way for
children
's development others argue that they should attend educational institutions.
This
essay is going to discuss both opinions and
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that
children
ought to go to
school
. Learning at
home
gives boys and girls a chance to get the attention they really need.
In other words
, all the focus will be
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on them unlike at
school
where there will be a lot of kids.
As a result
, they will understand better as the teacher observe where more emphasis should be given.
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, as I was
home schooling
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homeschooling

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my 5 years old kid, I discovered that it was difficult for her to master addition because she did know how to count properly so, we had to start counting again.
However
, there are a number of things that are done at
school
which are very essential for child development like playing. Educational institutions play a great role in
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children
. One of the most important thing that
children
get from schools is socialisation.
This
is so crucial as boys and girls will learn how to communicate with others and learn to interact
in
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different levels.
Further
,
children
will be playing with their peers which gives them confidence and
hence
, they will be sharing different ideas which
is
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so crucial for the growth of minors. There are
children
from different backgrounds with different behaviour and it will enable them to master between
an
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apply

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acceptable and unacceptable behaviour.To illustrate, my kid came back from
school
one day and told me how bad it was to talk back to your elders as one of her classmates had done. To conclude,
eventhough
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even though

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learning from
home
gives
children
a chance to learn effectively, it does not offer the social aspect of life which is much needed for the growth of boys and girls. In my opinion , I believe they should go to
school
.

Your opinion

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