Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

If we define culture as shared beliefs, values, attitudes and behaviours, it stands to reason
then
that a person's
country
of origin impacts their culture. The question is to what degree. Is nationality the defining influence or is it just
one
of many factors in play? Personally speaking, I would say both arguments have validity, but I would lean towards the latter. It is easy to understand the ‘defining influence’ argument. If someone is born and raised in a place, they will be heavily influenced by it. Psychologists refer to
this
as the ‘nurture argument’ - you are a product of your environment.
For example
, if your
country
's cuisine uses certain ingredients, your palate gets accustomed to those ingredients
,
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but may struggle with other less familiar flavours. If your
country
has a traditional style of music, say, reggae or rock, all citizens will be exposed to it and,
as a result
, are more likely to enjoy it. On the other side of the
argument
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we need to consider the effects of globalisation. Most people have daily access and exposure to other cultures. The evidence is all around us- restaurants, films and foreign businesses are ubiquitous.
One
of the benefits of globalisation is that it offers us a selection of cultural possibilities to choose from. It is unlikely that you will find any citizen of a certain
country
who does not have likes or preferences that come from outside of their
country
of origin.
In addition
, more and more people work, study or travel extensively away from their home
country
. Inevitably, these people will be subject to new influences. My own view is that while we are influenced by our nationality, in
this
globalised world,
one
's
country
of origin is only
one
aspect of our collective culture. We all adopt elements from other cultures on a daily basis, unconsciously or according to our preferences and experiences. To my mind,
this
is what makes the world
such
an interesting place.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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