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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Going for a vacation in our own nation and not visiting overseas for a holiday will be a point of argument amongst
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 time.
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 essay disagrees with the idea of exploring our own country
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 of travelling abroad for a tour in future. Increasing demand
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 tourism due to advancement in technology and for personal interest
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 as gaining knowledge about cross-culture will be the possibilities.
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 with, significant advancement in technology is happening every now and
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 like flights are reducing the travel time from one country to another at a cheaper price,
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people
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 are encouraged to go overseas on their vacations.
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, it’s a matter of pride for them when opting for an international trip
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domestic trips
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 situation got better in 2021, most of the
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 opted for international destinations at
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cheaper flight tickets
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 keen to fulfil their personal desires like gaining knowledge about other cultures, languages, cuisines etcetera broadens their horizon towards life.
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 of
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 population is going to increase in future as
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 are becoming more and more
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 towards their own desires and interests. For
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example, a multilingual employee always
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 more importance as compared to others while dealing with foreign delegates. To conclude,
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people
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 would be more inclined towards visiting other countries as compared to their own because of technology facilitating our cost-effective tours and
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 in order to fulfil their personal desires or goals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
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