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İn some countries ,a few people eran extremely high salaries.Some people think that this is good for a country,while others believe that the goverment should control and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both two views and give your opinion.

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İt is debated issue whether or not earned
Money
 should be limited by the
government
.
This
 essay will study both two views point and presents my personal take on on the matter. On the one hand ,there is an array of factors why those who advocate
government
 should not control salaries and limit the amount
people
 say that.
Firstly
, the same occupational groups ,
such
 as doctors and teachers,are pivotal.
That is
 to say, health and education should be the top priorities of any governments, and
people
 who work in these jobs should earn high-salary .
Therefore
, workers will be rewarded for their labour.
Secondly
, if
people
 earn a lot of
Money
 without inflexible rules,they will more likely become willing for their job,which made the financial level of not only family but
also
 social increase.Because the more the amount of earning
money
 ,the more to acquire what they want is will be accessible.
On the other hand
 , some proponents ,whose ı
also
 agree with them ,claim that high salaries and the number of
people
 earning high wage should be restricted by politics.Put simply, the
government
 should establish strict rules about wages and the number of
people
 with a lot of wages.By doing so, the
government
 contribute to the economic equality of the public.
Therefore
,
people
 who work at the same status will earn the same
Money
,which enables employees equal opportunities for their career regardless of avarice. İn my opinion, when the
government
 support workers about the equal paying rise,
people
 will not be self – seeker for salary,unearned gains will not be ,and the differences between poor and rich family will not be high. In conclusion,
although
 there are some
people
 who uphold individuals should earn a high amount of
Money
 without limitation done by the state ,ı completely say that had not the limitation of management about pay raise and the figures for
people
 been ,the conflict among society would have been a lot.
Submitted by Ahmet Münir KOCAMAN on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income inequality
  • economic disparity
  • government intervention
  • progressive tax system
  • societal divide
  • income caps
  • economic growth
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • public services
  • cohesive society
  • talent attraction
  • lucrative sectors
  • wealth accumulation
  • tax contributions
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