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İn some countries ,a few people eran extremely high salaries.Some people think that this is good for a country,while others believe that the goverment should control and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both two views and give your opinion.

İt is debated issue whether or not earned
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 should be limited by the
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 essay will study both two views point and presents my personal take on on the matter. On the one hand ,there is an array of factors why those who advocate
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 should not control salaries and limit the amount
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 say that.
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, the same occupational groups ,
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 as doctors and teachers,are pivotal.
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 to say, health and education should be the top priorities of any governments, and
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 who work in these jobs should earn high-salary .
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, workers will be rewarded for their labour.
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, if
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 earn a lot of
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 without inflexible rules,they will more likely become willing for their job,which made the financial level of not only family but
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 social increase.Because the more the amount of earning
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 ,the more to acquire what they want is will be accessible.
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 , some proponents ,whose ı
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 agree with them ,claim that high salaries and the number of
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 earning high wage should be restricted by politics.Put simply, the
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 should establish strict rules about wages and the number of
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 with a lot of wages.By doing so, the
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 contribute to the economic equality of the public.
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,
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 who work at the same status will earn the same
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,which enables employees equal opportunities for their career regardless of avarice. İn my opinion, when the
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 support workers about the equal paying rise,
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 will not be self – seeker for salary,unearned gains will not be ,and the differences between poor and rich family will not be high. In conclusion,
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 there are some
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 who uphold individuals should earn a high amount of
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 without limitation done by the state ,ı completely say that had not the limitation of management about pay raise and the figures for
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 been ,the conflict among society would have been a lot.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income inequality
  • economic disparity
  • government intervention
  • progressive tax system
  • societal divide
  • income caps
  • economic growth
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • public services
  • cohesive society
  • talent attraction
  • lucrative sectors
  • wealth accumulation
  • tax contributions
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