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Establishe good relationship in the workplace is not important as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. What extent agree or disagree with this statement.

#establishe #relationship #workplace #person #focus #work
Nowadays,
working
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 environment is becoming more and more famous than the ancient time. It
is often argue
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 that the main purpose of employees to give full attention to their job
instead
 of, making bonds with other
co- workers
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. I
am totally disagree
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 with
this
 perspective.
This
 essay will elaborate
how
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 it's crucial to create good relations at
work
-site?
To begin
 with, any
work
 which is done in
team
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the team
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 gives huge benefits in various ways and teamwork is only successful if workers share
good
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a good
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 bonding with each other because different minds have multitudinous formulas to solve any
work related
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 issues and queries. As well as, when workers enjoy
company
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 of each other. They put their full focus on
work
. In
this
 way, group
work
 plays a paramount role in the development of the company.
For example
, I am working in Amazon and every week,our
manager
provide
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 us
duties
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 which we have to do in groups. We can see that Amazon is the number one delivery company all around the world because of its best policies of conducting
work
 from employees.
Furthermore
, when employees share
strong
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 bond with their employers is
also
 helps them to get
higher
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 position in
office
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the office
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. Whenever worker applied for another job, they can use the reference of their
manager
, boss if they have
good
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 connection with them or
sometime
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, their boss refers their name for high positions. Add to it, during any kind of stress or tension,
worker
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the worker
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 can share with their other co-workers.
For instance
, my uncle
have
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friendship
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a friendship
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 with his
manager
 and he gets
help
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 of $4000 from his
manager
 for his treatment. To recapitulate, it is undeniable that
the
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every employee should
be concentrate
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be concentrating
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 on his duties but it is
also
 significant that the secret behind every successful business is the strong bond which shares by every people who is working there .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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