Establishe good relationship in the workplace is not important as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. What extent agree or disagree with this statement.

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Nowadays,
working
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environment is becoming more and more famous than the ancient time. It
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that the main purpose of employees to give full attention to their job
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of, making bonds with other
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. I
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with
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perspective.
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it's crucial to create good relations at
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with, any
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which is done in
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the team
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gives huge benefits in various ways and teamwork is only successful if workers share
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bonding with each other because different minds have multitudinous formulas to solve any
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work related
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issues and queries. As well as, when workers enjoy
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of each other. They put their full focus on
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. In
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way, group
work
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plays a paramount role in the development of the company.
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, I am working in Amazon and every week,our
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us
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which we have to do in groups. We can see that Amazon is the number one delivery company all around the world because of its best policies of conducting
work
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from employees.
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, when employees share
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bond with their employers is
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helps them to get
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position in
office
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. Whenever worker applied for another job, they can use the reference of their
manager
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, boss if they have
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connection with them or
sometime
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, their boss refers their name for high positions. Add to it, during any kind of stress or tension,
worker
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the worker
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can share with their other co-workers.
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friendship
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a friendship
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with his
manager
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and he gets
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of $4000 from his
manager
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for his treatment. To recapitulate, it is undeniable that
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every employee should
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on his duties but it is
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significant that the secret behind every successful business is the strong bond which shares by every people who is working there .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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