Some people say that parents have the most significant influence in a child's development. However, other say that things like television or friends have the must important influence on them. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that technology and social circle around the child has an enormous impact on the growth while

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some individuals believe that

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play a vital role in the development of their offsprings. In my opinion,

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are the

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person who taught their

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the difference between right and wrong and most of the characteristics are inherited genetically. There are a number of people who think that their

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learn those things which they watch in movies, serials, and around them. They just connect themself with unrealistic imaginations and thinks that it's a truth that

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them mental stress and makes them rude.Due to ,that they face other effects

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lack of concentration in studies, unhealthy lifestyle. To illustrates, in, India

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are working for 8 hours job for

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reason they are not able to spend quality time with their

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so in order to pass the time they watch non-fiction or sometimes, indulge in bad company.

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should decide what they can do or others don't. On the others hand,

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influenced by their

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are always successful and become a better version of society. Most

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people argued that

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teacher is their mother and father who taught them moral values, time management and how to become a responsible person.

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,There are a lot of famous personalities who hold a good reputation in the world as their

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Aishwarya Rai , Deepika Padukone. In conclusion,

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friends and entertainment have a role in shaping the child

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have the most aspect for the

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mental as well as the physical development.

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