IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social and practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
As globalization has been promoted in
this
 world, more people live in a place where they cannot use their mother tongue. As a consequence, they cannot understand the
language
 in the country so that they are causing some problems. In the following essay, I would argue that I agree
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
that living in a country that
make
Change the verb form
makes
show examples
 you speak
foreign
Add an article
a foreign
show examples
language
 will cause a problem and how can it be solved.
First
 of all, if understanding the
language
 is difficult, following the rule in the community will be
also
 challenging and it would cause an issue. People who cannot follow the rule would not be admired
from
Change preposition
by
show examples
 the local community because they have
policy
Add an article
a policy
show examples
 and
also
 to protect themselves.
For example
, when a man from America went into the sacred place for local Thai people because he could not read the attention, he was harmed by the local inhabitant because they were afraid of the man who
invade
Change the verb form
invades
show examples
 the area.
This
 incident occurred because the man moved to a place where he
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
 to use a foreign
language
. One of the
solution
Change to a plural noun
solutions
show examples
 might be
let
Fix the infinitive
to let
show examples
 the inhabitant
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
show examples
know that the individual
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
non-native
Add an article
a non-native
show examples
 speaker and to have
more
Add an article
a more
show examples
 generous way of thinking. Those social and practical issues happen because of a fear
for
Change preposition
of
show examples
 inappropriate
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
show examples
 of foreigners;
however
, typically they do not intend to break the rule: the misunderstanding or misinterpretation will make the gap.
Therefore
, if the native citizens try to appreciate them, it will reduce the issues.
Submitted by dokmally2 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
What to do next:
Look at other essays: