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There is a problem today that copyright materials such as music, films and books are freely available on the internet with the result that the owners of the works lose money. Do you feel that this is a good or a bad thing?

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Social media exposure has increased so much and it seems everything is available on the
interenet
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internet
. In
this
 situation
loose
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 the price worth for their
compsition
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composition
 because ordinary citizens can easily access it from the
interenet
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internet
.
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 does have negative implications for the creator and
this
 essay will explain why. It is often believed that
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people
 downloading
music
, films and books from the internet
are
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areas
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as
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the same as illegally stealing a CD from a shop.
This
 is true for the fact that the hard work earned for producing
such
music
 and film is
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losing
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loosing
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losing
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 its copyright because it can easily be accessed without the
authors
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author's
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 permission. A good example is those who
downloads
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 from youtube using a weblink that easily converts
music
 and
make
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 it compatible with
with
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a
music
 player.
Hence
, downloading had become so normal that
people
 fail to see its ethical and copyright implications.
Moreover
, some
people
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 artists through
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stream
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- ripping sites
thus
, makes it easier for them to produce more copies and sell
it
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 to
indiduals
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individuals
 either from the upper or lower class community.
As a result
 musicians and authors lose their royalties they deserve.
Consequently
,
this
 threatens the livelihood of creative artists because
isntead
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instead
 of getting profit from their work,
people
 are simply stealing it from them by downloading it
freely
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 from the internet. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, I feel like the musicians and authors or of books and movies are not benefiting from their talent in producing
such
 media to entertain
people
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 if no one will act to prevent ordinary citizens from acquiring these things without paying for it.
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