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Some people say that e-books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is thought that the latest technological advancement and digital book may take over
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conventional newspapers and magazines. In my opinion, I strongly disagree
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 opinion because the poor network connections and lack of technical expertise of the public would minimise the chance to happen
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in the foreseeable future. The availability of network connections to the entire world is minimal.
In other words
, to read and watch newspapers and television,
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fast and efficient connectivity
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 extremely necessary;
however
,
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 parts of the world
this
 is not the scenario.
For instance
, even though India is
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 hub of internet users, most of them have been encountering the issue of poor network signal during their usage. Due to
this
, their usage limited to listening to radios or checking their social media updates rather than reading online news and other magazines.
Secondly
, a majority of the population lacks
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 skills
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necessary to have in order to use electronic media in their
day
 to
day
 life. Many news channels and publications have their own applications to generate their content that may be complicated to use for
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 since they are poorly equipped with
technical
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 nuances of the digital platform.Eventually, the users hesitate to incorporate these in their
day
 to
day
 life and may not be going to happen anytime in the near future. The complexity can be usually seen while using newspapers apps,
for example
, the Hindu or BBC. In conclusion,
although
 it has been noticed that overall the internet customers
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 been increased hugely, I hardly think that it would replace the traditional way of
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 reading or magazine subscription.
This
 is because of slow networks and insufficient technical skills to use these highly complicated applications.
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