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For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Parents are not considered to be better than teachers at influencing schoolchildren on comprehension and social maturity. In my perspective, teachers
are indeed provide
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 better chances for
children
 to develop certain skills and knowledge. 
Children
 who go to school can obtain academic knowledge and gain critical thinking throughout classes. While parents are more likely to not have enough time to teach or reassess properly during
children
’s upbringing. Take math as an example, the subject helps youngsters learn how
apply
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 their knowledge on solving problems from equations.
Moreover
,
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 trip is a good opportunity for
children
 to develop critical thinking and
problem solving
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. As going on a trip, there may be certain situations happen,
therefore
, it can be essential lessons for the adolescents.  During school, pupils have more chances to grow social skills because they can interact with different types of people outside of their family circle. As
children
 make connections with their peers, they will learn how to share
information
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 which will benefit
for
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their communication skills. Meeting friends is an advantage because
children
 can share their common interests as well as learn how to reject differences appropriately.
For instance
, since the COVID pandemic occurred,
children
 are no longer allowed to have close contact with their peers,
therefore
, they can learn how to respect people’s personal space and care for everyone’s health. To sum up, teachers are professional in education that
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 the ability to help
children
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 their learning journey and social development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foundational role
  • structured influence
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • appetite for learning
  • curriculum
  • learning styles
  • socialize
  • cooperate
  • navigate social norms
  • underestimated
  • role models
  • confined
  • academic year
  • life lessons
  • formative years
  • moral and behavioral development
  • supportive home environment
  • reinforcing
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