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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful add persuading us to buy things coma other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to a group of ,
people
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 the most successful way to attract customers towards buying the
products
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 is through advertisement while others oppose
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 view and think that due to a plethora of
advertisements
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 it gets no attention. I personally think that
advertisements
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 are behind the popularity of the
products
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion. The
first
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 reason according to the
people
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 who think advertising things persuade the population because most of the
advertisements
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 connect the
products
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 with buyers emotionally .Companies link their
products
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 to culture, traditions and various other emotional facts of that specific country to attract buyers .
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, according to a report in, The Times of India, Verka, company that sells dairy-based
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 experienced a rise in the sale by 15% after presenting the advertisement related to traditional India. In short, the
advertisements
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 would be not heart-touching
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 the company would face no sales increment. In regard to the
people
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 who think the public does not pay attention to the
advertisements
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 maybe because of millions of
advertisements
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 shown nowadays. As everyone has a hectic schedule, so it becomes almost impossible to remember and think about each advertisement shown. On top of that
advertisements
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 are displayed everywhere,
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, on billboards, newspapers, televisions, the Internet and radios.
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 most of the
advertisements
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 went unnoticed. To conclude, some
people
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 think
advertisements
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 play a crucial role in attracting
people
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 towards buying things while others think that
people
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 do not pay attention to it. I personally agree with the former view.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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