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Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The overconsumption of fossil fuels has become a major topic of concern recently. Some
people
 suggest that increasing the
fuel
price
 can be the solution to cope with environmental issues. Personally, I believe that other measures should
also
 be given equal consideration.
Firstly
, increasing the
fuel
 expense cannot minimise the global dependence on
fuel
. It should be
first
 noted that even when the
price
 of
fuel
 increases significantly,
people
 still cannot cut down the tremendous demand for petrol at once.
For example
, in daily life,
people
 still need to use their cars despite the fluctuation in the petrol
price
. Another clear reason is that petrol is
also
 intended for other applications in manufacturing industries and agricultural purposes. If the
price
 of
fuel
 increases, the national economy could suffer many unfavourable consequences. When it comes to reducing greenhouse gas emissions, some measures should be taken to mitigate the problems of overconsuming
fuel
. The most practical measure at the moment is to reduce the demand for resources in daily activities like
traveling
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 or production.
This
 can be done by encouraging
people
 to turn to mass-producing energy-efficient products like hybrid cars or implementing new saving energy technology in manufacture.
Besides
, the most sustainable solution is to lower the reliance on
fuel
 by taking advantage of alternative resources. Wind and tidal power in the Netherlands, nuclear power in Japan, and solar power in the United States have all proven their efficiency in energy in energy production. These could be employed in other parts of the world to minimise the global dependence on fossil
fuel
. All existing data above shows that only
increasing
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 the
fuel
price
 will not reduce the global warming effects. Some strong alternative measures need to be implemented to tackle
this
 situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental preservation
  • Sustainable transportation
  • Green technologies
  • Alternative energy sources
  • Renewable energy
  • Fuel-efficient vehicles
  • Electric vehicles (EVs)
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic impact
  • Consumer behavior
  • Disproportionate effect
  • Government subsidies
  • Comprehensive policies
  • Cost-effective solutions
  • Carbon footprint reduction
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