It is often said that government spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife,while there are other problems that are more important.do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction

Even though some people opine that the ruling body spends a lot of money on wildlife preservation,

other

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others

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believe that

those money

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that money

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could be used in other matters which are more important. I disagree with

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because

preservation

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the preservation

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of wild living creatures could help us to live in harmony for now and in future.

Body paragraph 1

To begin

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with, creatures living in the forest have a vital role in our ecosystem because it helps to stabilize and maintain the food cycle which includes human beings as well.

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projects

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related to

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topics are as important as other topics which

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to be taken very seriously by the government.

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such

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projects

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could aid plants as well which has a crucial role in the food chain.

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, initiatives for the well being of animals as well as plants are equally important as other

projects

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to make the world a better place to live in.

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In addition

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, protecting

wild life

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wildlife

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could save a lot of endangered animals, plants and birds from extinction as they

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play an important task in the food chain. There are a wide variety

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species

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of species

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vanished

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that vanished

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from the earth due to the exploitation of resources by human beings. Initiatives to improve the condition could redeem the surroundings back to

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their

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original shape.

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, Pandas in China were an endangered

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before,

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there

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numbers are rapidly increasing due to the collective effort by the Wildlife Organisation.

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in turn helped other plant

species

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and animals to come back to their life.

Conclusion

To conclude, in my opinion, I disagree with

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even though some people believe that spending

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amount of money

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such

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types of

projects

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are meaningless.

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such

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initiatives have to be implemented all over the world to improve and bring back the endangered

species

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back

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apply

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Ashith

Apr 11, 2021

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

5.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

301 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Wildlife conservation
Biodiversity
Ecosystem
Human welfare
Poverty alleviation
Resource allocation
Cost-benefit analysis
Non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
Ecotourism
Sustainable development
Preservation
Endangered species
Habitat destruction
Climate change
Environmental stewardship

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