Governments in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on foods and beverages with high levels of sugar. Some think these taxes are a good idea while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays,
government
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the government
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of several states imposing new
tax
law for
suger
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sugar
based
products
by concern about
people
's health.
Also
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,Also
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there are rising some argument of advantages and disadvantages and
this
essay will show the best way to do so.
Firstly
, with
this
modern
life
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lifestyle
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style
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,style
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people
are suffering many diseases, like
diabete
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diabetes
, obesity,
cholecterol
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cholesterol
and many others.
Furthermore
, these diseases are directly affecting
to
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other long term illness, like cancer,
cardiovasclour
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cardiovascular
diseases and it is already
major
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a major
the major
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problem
of
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in
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most countries.
Primary
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The primary
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step of imposing
tax
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a tax
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for
those
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that suger
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suger
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sugar
containing
products
is
better
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a better
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solution among others, like educating
people
, conducting campaigns.
For example
, results showing
decline
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a decline
the decline
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of
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in
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sugar based
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sugar-based
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product sales in
last
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the last
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few years in
most
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the most
a most
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state by launching new
tax
law for those
products
.
hopfully
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hopefully
, within
next
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the next
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few
years
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,years
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most companies will
tranfer
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transfer
to low
sugar based
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sugar-based
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production,
could
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which could
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help to improve
people
's health.
On the other hand
, due to
tax
implication
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,implication
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most
products
are increasing prices and in the market has no other alternatives to purchase for those goods.
Also
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it takes
long
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a long
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time to change
people
's eating habits
becasue
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because
it will not
happend
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happen
happened
so quickly. For
intance
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instance
, recently
fast
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the fast
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food industry is rapidly increasing and
people
are addicting those foods and drinks for some reasons.
Moreover
, there is a risk of
downfall
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the downfall
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of consumer business by imposing
tax
and will badly affect to the national development. In
conclution
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conclusion
, nations by imposing
tax
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a tax
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could limit the consumption of
suger
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sugar
riched foods and it helps to better
health
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healthy
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life for
people
. Despite the other factors, I
belive
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believe
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this
is the most suitable solution should take by
government
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the government
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to among the others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • processed foods
  • punitive measures
  • revenue
  • public health campaigns
  • awareness
  • government overreach
  • personal freedoms
  • unhealthy diets
  • economic burden
  • sugar-related health issues
  • consumer behavior
  • taxation
  • high levels of sugar
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