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The media should stop reporting details of crimes to the public because it only has negative influences on them. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Some
people
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 think that television should stop reporting lawlessness to the public . I hold that it would be arbitrary to take a superficial view and conclude that the news should
become
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 to a halt. It believes that the coverage reporting minutiae of crimeal both
advantage
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 and disadvantages. Many taxi-hailing companies
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 to select the
driver'sbackground
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drivers background
,
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 and improve software
function
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. It
add
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 real-time positioning, recording and
dialing
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 emergency contact telephone,to provide the public with a safe and secure ride condition. It believes that the coverage reporting minutiae of scandal to the public may hurt the
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.
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, reporting the misdeeds to the public
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 has positive aspects.
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 aware that
people
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 improve the public's alertness and safety awareness,
thus
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 reducing the possibility of being killed.
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, Many taxi-hailing companies
begain
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began
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 to select the driver. and improved the system, adding real-time positioning, recording, and
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 emergency contact numbers, to provide the public with a safe and secure ride. After learning about the report,especially women, will reduce going out alone at night, carry alarm equipment with them, and be alert and aware of taking a taxi.
Admiitly
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, reporting
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crime
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the crime
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 to the public
which
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bring
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 some negative to the public. it will
also
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 provide useful
anti
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anti-crime
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crime
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 experience
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enhance
people
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's ability to prevent
crime
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. The purpose of reporting
crime
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 details is to give the public the right to know the whole truth. If the media stops reporting the details of crimes, it will leave the public in an ignorant and dangerous environment for a long time,
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resulting in many serious consequences. First of all, the radio's
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 of not telling the public the truth
of
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about
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 the event infringes
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people's
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on people's
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 right to know. Some bureaucrats
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use their power to sweep that under the carpet. That makes
the
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people
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 blinded by the incomplete information reported by the media, and it is easy to form incorrect values.
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, there are deeper social problems behind some criminals. If the government does not know about these social problems, like
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education
,
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people
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 will be in danger all the time.
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, it is
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painful
 to say that
televisions
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television
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 to stop reporting to the public because it infringes on the public's own rights and puts
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man and the whole society in unknown danger. essential information to prevent a similar atrocity. t

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive media coverage
  • fear and anxiety
  • desensitize
  • criminal activities
  • invade privacy
  • focus on
  • promoting positive stories
  • appropriate context
  • solutions
  • negative influence
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