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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantage?

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Visiting abroad during education is considered important for adults by educators. Despite travelling abroad has advantages like People exploration and learning a new language, it
also
 has drawbacks like financial stress for a few undergraduate and difficulty in adapting to a new environment. In my opinion, spending time abroad gains significant benefits in
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 career even though it is expensive for some adults. Exploring new people and country is profound to teenagers, which gives them an abundance of confidence and it
also
 allows them to learn new abilities. Visiting international countries during studies brings them a chance to interact with imperative and considerate personalities.
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, each country has their own way of teaching whereas most universities in the west of the world insist
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society which allows adults to directly interconnect with different people and pushes them to survive in
this
 challenging environment.
This
 ultra-demanding life experience thread undergraduate to sequentially grow and adapt to any accustom.
Although
 there is a benefit in international exchange visits to the pupil
such
 as habituating new challenge, there are disadvantages to few
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 who have financial difficulties and have struggled in adapting to new surroundings.
For instance
, few students who are from lower financial status would not be able to pay flight and other miscellaneous charges for their international travel which eventually creates stress in them. The other factor is set to the new conditions say food, climate and language will be a hassle. International travel is
thus
 not possible for every student as that needs support from charities and educationalists. International visits bring benefit to the teenager in the school is what been felt by the educational instructors. While having a chance of travelling internationally during studying is a device,
however
 lack of finance would lead students into stress. In my opinion, Teenagers should try their level best in having their education ladder high by international visits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educationalists
  • international exchange visits
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • school
  • exposes
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • enhances
  • language skills
  • promotes
  • independence
  • self-confidence
  • builds
  • lifelong friendships
  • provides
  • unique learning experiences
  • expensive
  • homesickness
  • emotional distress
  • careful planning
  • logistical arrangements
  • disrupt
  • academic progress
  • safety
  • security risks
  • cultural appropriation
  • misunderstandings
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