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Families who do not send their children to public schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people argue that
families
 with youngsters in private
institutions
 should be exempted from
tax
 payment that funds universal
education
 through the public school system. I disagree with
this
 opinion because it will deny the
government
 the needed revenue to fund public
education
. Granting
tax
 exemption to
families
 who send their
children
 to private
schools
 would deny the less privileged
children
 access to basic
education
.
This
 is because the funds needed to run these
schools
 are derived from taxpayers money. The decision to patronize private
institutions
 is solely that of the parent so they ought not to be exempted.
For instance
, Having both the rich and poor pay
tax
 gives the underprivileged
children
 reasons to attend school because tuition fees will be greatly reduced.
Therefore
, parents with
children
 in private
institutions
 should be made to pay
tax
 so that the underprivileged
children
 can have access to
education
.
Furthermore
, If
tax
 exemption is granted to
families
 who send their
children
 to private
schools
, it would deny the
government
 the needed revenue to fund public learning. These
families
 are usually very rich and their contribution to the public purse is needed to sustain public
schools
.
For example
, Public
institutions
 in Nigeria derive most of their funding from the
government
. The authority is able to do
this
 because of a policy that does not exclude anyone from paying
tax
.
That is
 to say that, people with youngsters in
private
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 institute should not be excluded from paying
tax
 so that the
government
 will not be denied funds to equip the public
schools
. In conclusion,
although
families
 with
youngster
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 in private
schools
 pay out of pocket for their
children
's
education
, I strongly believe that they should pay
tax
 because it goes a long way in giving underprivileged
children
 a chance at
education
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Inequality
  • Socio-economic groups
  • Public good
  • Well-educated population
  • Double payment argument
  • Tax base
  • Infrastructure
  • Qualified teachers
  • Choice and privilege
  • Tax credits
  • Deductions
  • Exempting
  • Public education
  • Funding
  • Resources
  • Collective responsibility
  • Educational quality
  • Directly benefit
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