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In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#countries #someone #job #age #development
In the competitive era,
people
 are engaged in graveyards shift leads to
ameliorated
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 and exotic lifestyle, under which they find arduous extract for fulfilling all their luxurious needs. In
few
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 nations, if someone rejects
for
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it for
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 their
an
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apply
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old
age
, authorities will take legal action,
this
 is
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 positive impact. I will discuss my viewpoints in the
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following
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 paragraphs. Admittedly, In
modern
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 period job is very prominent for every
age
persons
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person
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due to
advancement
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the advancement
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 of technology expenses are rising day by day so
people
 cannot afford
in
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apply
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their pension so , they prefer to do the job after their retirement.
Moreover
,
old
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old-age
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age
 employers are very beneficial for the
companies
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company's
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 success, because
of
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,that they have enormous experience
to resolve
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in resolving
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 the impediment easily.
For example
,
a
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in a
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recent survey done by the York
university
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University
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 student 75% prefers to work after
60-year-old
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60 years old
 because they cannot sit
ideal
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apply
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in their home. They want to do work for their inner satisfaction.
Furthermore
, earlier
age
 individuals are learning numerous things for their seniors
such
 as how to deal with big issues or make new connections with customers
so
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and so
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 on. Example for
supporting
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, In ancient
time
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times
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 individuals
had
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did
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 not any resources to
learnt
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the
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new technical things
hence
 their elder
people
 helped them to share
own
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their own
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experience
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experiences
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 with them.
However
, nowadays
people
 can learn technical things in a
labortary
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laboratory
 or research centre but without an experienced tutor, they cannot perform.
For example
, the
apple
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Apple
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 company CEO is 65 years old. Every company give him the best salary offer for a job, because of his knowledge, experience and
an
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intelligence.
To conclude
, the positive development outweighs the negative development. No matter how old are you, if you have a passion to do something
so
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apply
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they
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you
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 can achieve it at any
age
.
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