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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Genetic modification is an important issue in society nowadays. Many
people
 think that it will make human’s lives better in many ways. Others argue that it might harm
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life on
planet
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. It is indisputable that
genetic
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 engineering process is now used in many systems.
However
, it is not an originally nature system and it might
induces
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 various risks in human lives and nature. According to
this
 statement, there are many systems involved with genetic engineering that can improve the quality and provide alternative choices for
people
 today.
For example
, genetically modified food
such
 as
gluten free
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 bread,
lactose free
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 milk or white strawberries
are
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 now popular in
market
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 as optional foods for
people
 who are gluten or lactose
intolerance
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.
Moreover
, it creates
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 new variety in food for
human
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 to experience new things.
On the other hand
,
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genetic manipulation is a set of technologies used to change the genetic makeup of cells and it might harm
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human wellness in long term consumption. According to
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recent research,
people
 who consume GMOs foods
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 a long time have more risk to develop cancer than
people
 who consume organic foods.
In addition
, genetic engineering is leading concern about
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 of genes development in target organisms which might
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effect
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to
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the
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nature on our earth in the future. In conclusion, there are some benefits and drawbacks of
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genetic engineering. I believed that there are plenty
benefits
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 of
this
 technology but it should have
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regulations to maintain and prevent the negative effects that will
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 in the future
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