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With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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There is no doubt that massive increase in demand for non-renewable
resources
 like oil and gas worldwide. Perhaps some
areas
 are still not receiving permission to open for more
resources
. I don’t agree to provide access to open windows of fossil fuel as it will create various non-curable diseases and
this
 could
also
 be impacting the environmental situation badly.
Firstly
, the consequences of the spiking in demand for fossil fuel
resources
 have created a crisis due to the establishment of new factories and industries.
Therefore
, the government of many countries have been searching for new locations, which have an abundant amount of oil and gas. Another negative effect to open undiscovered
areas
 that it would unbalance the environmental condition that could be a dire situation in the future. A Few years ago, a typhoon cyclone had diminished most eastern part of Japan because of huge deforestation in that area.
Additionally
, earth
resources
 are very limited but we if find new
areas
 for
this
then
 it could
also
 affect us by acute disease.
Secondly
, giving access to open new places for more
resources
 would
also
 responsible for health concerns. Due to chemical gases come out by filtration process while segregation of oil that will be perilous for staffs and their families.
For example
, the Bhopal gas treaty had happened only because of the exploitation of chlorofluorocarbon, which was more dangerous for asthmatic people and the government had opened that area to the public without any intimation.
As a result
, thousands of employees had died. In conclusion, it is absolutely correct that open to access new
areas
 for more
resources
 will deal with harmful effects because it creates non-curable diseases and it will
also
 impact our environmental condition.
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  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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