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Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays, even though doctors all over the world agree that fast
food
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 is bad for people’s health, more and more people are eating it.
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 of listening to all the dangerous side effects that trash
food
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 can provoke, individuals are used to
eat
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 it anyway.
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 phenomenon may have different reasons that I will discuss in the following paragraphs.
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, it is crucial to say that eating unhealthy
food
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 can be correlated to a bad economic condition.
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, when a person cannot afford to buy healthy products
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 as vegetables, meat or fish,
it
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they
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 will probably get some trash
food
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, because it is less
expansive
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expensive
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 and faster to get.
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, eating a Big Mac at
McDonalds
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McDonald's
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 will satisfy the hunger of both an adult and a child and
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 more people are attracted by the idea of being satisfied after one of these fat Hamburgers.
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, fast
food
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 stores are
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 representing a family tradition and
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 most of the consumers feel an emotional bond to brands
such
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 as Mc.Donalds. In order to keep their customers attached to the brand, i.e. Burger King creates a unique experience in
it’s
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 stores, by using images and delivering gadgets of
it’s
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 burgers.
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, it is important to reduce the consumption of unhealthy
food
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.
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, if at school children would gain more knowledge about the importance of eating healthy, they would become more conscious about the danger of some ingredients used in the production of fast
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. Another important aspect is that i.e. Mc Donalds or Burger Kind should not only offer fat burgers, but
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 vegetables and salads. All in all, the issue of reducing
fast
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fast-food
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food
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 consumption has risen a lot of debate and it is both the duty of consumers and companies to change their lifestyle in a more healthy way.
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