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Many children these days have their own mobile phones. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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 has made the life of people much easier than before. Nowadays, most of the juveniles have their personal technological gadgets which assert both merits and demerits to them which will be discussed in subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, there are a plethora of positive points of having cellphones
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, the usage of mobiles would be extremely beneficial for the masses to contact each other in emergency situations.
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, youngsters could call their up bringers in case of any threat or danger.
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, upgraded mobile phones have myriad applications for different purposes which are helpful in completing their daily chores
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 as alarms or reminders.
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, conversating through cellulars helps the young buddings to remove the feeling of home-sickness and keep in touch with their family members. To exemplify, according to a survey by a leading newspaper, it has been estimated that 65% of adults are using applications
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 as Facetime, Skype, etcetera to communicate with family and friends which
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 make them feel distressed and happy. On the paradoxical side, every aspect has its negative points too.
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 of all, it is an undeniable fact that excess usage of smartphones is harmful to the human body as these devices emit dangerous waves which are detrimental for children.
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, using mobiles for long hours puts an adverse effect on the eyesight of a person.
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 of all, operating technological phones is just a wastage of time because
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 of concentrating on academics, teenagers start surfing on internet and get distracted from their primary work. To epitomize, according to research, it has been found that in
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 contemporary society, 70% of young individuals prefer to play games on their own devices rather than studying from those phones. Pondering over the topic, there are numerous advantages and drawbacks of having smart gadgets with children,
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, I firmly opine that its benefits outweigh its disadvantages as mobiles are crucial for juveniles in emergency circumstances and gaining knowledge through the internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emergencies
  • enhance learning
  • educational apps
  • monitoring
  • digital skills
  • distraction
  • face-to-face interactions
  • social development
  • physical health problems
  • inappropriate content
  • prolonged use
  • eye strain
  • sleep disturbances
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