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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

#computers #education #role #teachers #classroom
Nowadays, we can see how
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technology is growing day by day and reaching heights in every
feild
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field
 starting from agriculture to space.
However
, how much ever the
computers
 are being used in the field of education it cannot replace the
teachers
 in the classroom. In
olden
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 days, like 2 to 3 decades ago, there were no
computers
 in most of the educational institutes but there were few in some of the private schools especially top-rated
institues
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institutes
. During that time, students were completely
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 on
teachers
 for study materials and resources.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, now we can see those people's achievement and how
successfull
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successful
 they are even without
computers
.
Hence
, it is not necessary for
computers
 to be there in
educational
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 field.
However
, being in the 21st century where everything depends on technology and automation, everything is been replaced. Now in every institute
computers
 are
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 and mainly smart boards and smart class.
For instance
, during my
schooldays
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 I have come across smart class where we can understand concepts visually. Proponents say that one can acknowledge things easily when they use more senses.
Therefore
, when we are exposed to video classes, we do multitasking like listening, seeing and writing which helps us to learn easily with fun.
This
 fun learning is possible only with the help of
computers
. But it is not a crucial part
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 education. Only
teachers
 play
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 role in teaching.
Computers
 being machine cannot understand human emotions whereas
teachers
 can and personally look into each and every student behaviour and
also
 get feedback in return which helps them to improve their skills. By giving individual attention they maintain
proper
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 decorum of the class. To sum up, each has its own
benifits
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benefits
 and drawbacks. By using
computers
 will be more beneficial to students
however
 it cannot replace
teachers
 in the classroom even in future.
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