In some countries increasing number of people are suffering from from health problems result of eating too much fast foods government should impose higher taxes on them on what extent do you agree or disagree with this

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governmental taxes on junk
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different illnesses may decrease the number of people who have
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problem. Personally, I do not totally agree, because supposed action may lead to economic issues in states.
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suggestion which indeed could improve
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state of
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. Today a lot of people prefer to eat fast
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which is
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harmful for
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, approximately 45% of American citizens have
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obesity because of frequent eating of junk
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taxes
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meal in countries, as the USA possibly make
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better. In spite of
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action can have a
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of
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, there are could be several negative effects.
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of all, if humans do not stop
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and buy fast
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, they will have to increase their living
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expectancy
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financial situation in society.
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, some people probably do not understand
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measure, why government raise
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on their favourite and cheap meal.
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cause
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social demonstrations. So, the raising of
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taxes
can be dangerous. In conclusion,
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of some countries may try to improve
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health
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of
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in their states by escalating prices on fast
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however
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we should not forget about
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consequences
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as the falling level of
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and social protests.
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