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At the present time, the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, in some part of the world, the
population
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 of youngsters outnumbers the old adults' ones. In my perspective, the benefits of
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 trend outweigh its drawbacks.
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 essay will explore my idea in more details. Needless to say that having an older
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 in a country is beneficial in terms of using their experience and guidance for the younger generation.
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, we need older
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 to help and support the younger generation. For ,instance in some part of the words, grandparents take care of their grandchildren when their parents are at work or school.
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 will help them to be more focused on doing their jobs and can save some money too.
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, older
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 are in need of more health care and medication compared to the young
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.
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,
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 can put the government into lots of financial burdens and
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 money would have to come out of young
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's pocket. One of the most important benefits of having younger adults in some
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 lies in the fact that the economy will flourish
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 of having a fresh workforce.
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, Nigeria, where over 50 per cent of its
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 is under 25, has the highest workforce and is one of the major
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 which is becoming a centre of industrial productions.
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, having young
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also
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 help with the reduction in a number of nursing homes and hospital which again can reduce the amount of taxes per capita.
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, the government can spend less and invest more in the workforce in those young populated
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. To sum up, it seems to me that the advantages of having a new generation of
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 outweigh its disadvantages in many ways mostly by decreasing financial pressure on governments and giving those
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 the opportunities of becoming centres for industrial progression.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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