Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

It is considered by many that organising a global
sports
event
is
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a benefit
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benefit
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to the nation, whilst some
people
believe it brings detrimental effect. In
this
essay, I will discuss both sides opinion
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this
statement and explain why I consider it can bring more positive effects to a
country
.
To begin
with, sport is commonly known as
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an activity
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that can improve
people
's health. Organising an international
sports
event
will motivate the citizen to participate in
sports
also
to
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encourage the nation's
athletic
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to work hard and obtain a good result in a
world recognized
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event
.
As a result
, it can promote the pride of
country
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as well as citizens.
Furthermore
, global
sports
events can attract more tourists who enjoy attending the
event
, which lead to more revenue
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both the
government
and local businesses owners.
As a result
,
government
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the government
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will have more funding to subsidise other social issues. It is noticeable that hosting world
sports
events comes with many
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effects to both the
country
and its citizens.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
feel that
sports
event
is not something crucial and the
government
should not waste any effort or resources to host it. There are many more pressing social issues that
government
should prioritise over.
For instance
, the local
government
should allocate funding
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education and healthcare service in order to bridge the gap between rich and poor
people
.
Moreover
, a huge influx of tourists will lead to some environmental problem. To illustrate,
people
from foreign countries may not respect and protect the local's area, harm and pollution
is
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expected to arise. To conclude, despite the fact that it may create some pollution to the hosting
country
.
However
, it can help the
country
to alleviate poverty as well as promoting its pride and citizen's health. It is obviously great for the
country
to
organizing
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an international
sports
match.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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