In developing countries, some people believe that their government should introduce new technology to people in order to improve their quality of life. Others believe that offering free education would be more advantageous in the long term. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The group of persons reckon that the ruling authority should come up with the latest
technology
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for us to escalate our way of
life
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in
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positive direction
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other masses believe that
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government
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the government
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should provide
education
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free of cost to everyone which is a more positive development in the long term vision for the progressing countries. I gravitate towards the idea of providing
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apply
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free
education
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,
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and explain my prospects with suitable examples in upcoming paragraphs.
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with,
by
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introducing new
technology
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, which improves
people
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's
quality
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of
life
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is one of the ideas for only the wealthiest
people
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, and poverty-stricken
people
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do not find any benefits from
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development which
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useless for developing countries.
This
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can be simplified by saying that if the
government
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comes up with the latest
technology
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for their
people
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but
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a majority of
people
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unable to cope with these changes because they are in lack
education
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. To illustrate, Bihar
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state of India where
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government
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the government
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should take steps
for improving
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to improve
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people
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's
quality
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of
life
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, but poor
people
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can not benefit from it, and
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ideas only help the richest
people
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of the state.
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, the gap between
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poor and
rich
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the rich
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become
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has
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widen
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widened
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due to
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such
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development. On the other side,
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in the majority
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of underdeveloped countries, nowadays,
education
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is imperative in everyone's
life
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. If
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government
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the government
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provides free
education
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then
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this
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is an excellent step towards
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highly literate society and narrowing the gap between poor and rich in future.
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, if more
people
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educate from the free
education
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scheme
then
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economically deprived
people
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can have opportunities to educate themselves.
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is exemplified by the
government
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of Kerala provides
education
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free of cost to their
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that
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which
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is why the poor
people
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can take benefits from it and make their
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life
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lives
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better for living.
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,
education
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provides
an opportunities
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an opportunity
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to get employment, and if everyone has a job
then
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without introducing new
technology
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people
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can improve their
quality
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of
life
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. To recapitulate, For improving
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people
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people's
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quality
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of
life
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can not be achieved only by introducing new
technology
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.
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, It can be achieved by educating
people
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freely would be more beneficial in the long term because if
people
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educate
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are educated
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enough
then
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they can find a way to live a better
life
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by discovering new
technology
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for the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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