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Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #libraries #waste #resources #money #computers
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Book rooms either public or
privte
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private
 squander for nation's valuable assets and funds and it must be replaced with developed technology known as
computers
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this
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 notion is favoured by one
parts
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 of the society, in my
opinion
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 these machines cannot overcome
to
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the ancient way of spending time in
libraries
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,
this
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 essay will demonstrate the role of
libraries
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 to
develope
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develop
 social life and
then
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 it will argue that major benefit to access of unmilited
materials
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 for
readers
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 by
computers
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To begin
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 with,
libraries
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 have played
crucial
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 role to establish a strong bond with society since past eras. While visiting these book homes people share their thoughts with each
others
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 about authors and topics of reading
materials
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. They receive human
assitance
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assistance
 in
libraries
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 to clear their doubts rather than robotics.
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, they
develope
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develop
developed
 their social circle during
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a discussion
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 with
experinced
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experienced
readers
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For instance
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, a survey conducted recently by Cambridge University has revealed that 69% of the world population tend to spend at least an hour per day in
libraries
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 to obtain new ideas from
books
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 and their
experties
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expertise
.
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, these reading places help to sustain
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 environment among communities.
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,
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cutting-edge technology provides online reading facility to
public
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the public
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 through
computers
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This
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 features contain
huge
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a huge
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 store of
books
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 to use without any restrictions and
readers
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 of these
materials
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 do not have to wait for
long
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a long
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 time to
availablity
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availability
 of
books
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 after returning from other users. They can read any of their
favorite
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favourite
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 authors just by a click on
computer
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the computer
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Consequently
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, search engines in
this
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 machine give access
of
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 million of reading
materials
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 to their
readers
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, American researchers found that the majority of
young
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the young
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 generation using their
computers
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 or tablets to study general awareness
books
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 and
course related
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materials
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Hence
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,
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this developments
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this development
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 beneficial for those who required quick access
of
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books
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. To conclude,
libraries
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 and
computers
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 are have different kind of features for their
readers
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, people not only lose their concentration while reading
on screen
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 but
cost
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the cost
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 of buying
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 machine
also
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 unaffordable for everyone.
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, I believe that
development
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the development
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 of
libreries
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libraries
 around the world
does
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 not
wastw
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waste
want
countrie's
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country's
countries
 resources and wealth to make
this
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 society more friendly and give benefits to their users.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repository
  • cultural hub
  • community engagement
  • digital divide
  • inequality
  • sustainable
  • affordability
  • technological advancement
  • information retrieval
  • hybrid resources
  • social interaction
  • evolution of libraries
  • complementary
  • access to information
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