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The qualities that help people reach success in modern life cannot be learned in university or other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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It is considered that standard that helps
people
 to attained success in modern
life
 cannot be taught in a higher institution or any learning centres. In my opinion, I disagree, because university education is a stepping stone to accomplishment in
life
 .
However
, the environment
also
 contributes to the rate of accomplishment. On the one hand ,I believe that a university education is needed for one to be successful in
life
 .
This
 is because most higher institution prepares their candidate on what to expect outside the world.
As a result
, the school grades help in getting a good job .
This
 results, in individual ,able to contributes their own quota to the development of their society.
Thus
 ,
this
 is considered to a quality success rate.
For instance
, many studies have shown that a high percentage of
people
 with a good certificate from learning institutions are the leaders of the country because higher positions require a good grade from schools.
On the other hand
, the environment
also
 has a way of contributing to the growth of the
people
.
This
 is because apart from having certificate
people
 need to learn the core values and culture of the society they belong to and
this
 might not be learnt in school but might be developed within the environment or society by watching others .
For instance
, many studies have shown that for
people
 to reach the peak of their career ones need to learn their culture and understand it In my opinion, I believe that a university education is needed for
people
 to be happy and successful in
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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