Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, public
health
is a major concern as people affected by chronic diseases are rapidly increasing. Some people believe that the best solution is to increase sports facilities while others are
skeptical
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about the benefits brought by
this
initiative and say that there are different ways to solve
this
issue. On the one hand, it is true that one of the most important
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of our
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lives
life
lifes
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to maintain a good state of
health
is physical exercise,
therefore
increasing the number of
sport
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facilities will probably
motivates
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more people to work out or play outdoor sports
such
as football, tennis or volleyball.
Additionally
, two of the most expensive chronic conditions for the public
health
sector are autoimmune diseases and mental disorders.
Thus
, physical exercise
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a crucial role in these two issues as after a prolonged workout the body releases both analgesic molecules like cortisol and
oppioid
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opioid
opioids
and the molecules of Happiness
such
as serotonin and endorphin.
However
, increasing only physical activity is not enough and it can not be considered the only solution to improve public
health
.
On the other hand
, two other solutions must be taken into account when it comes
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trying to improve the overall
health
of the population.
Firstly
, a good diet is fundamental as many of the most common diseases are caused by eating
to
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much
of
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junk food.
For example
, in the U.S.A almost half of the population suffer from diabetes, cardiovascular problems and obesity.
For instance
, changing the food industry in order to sell healthy food in the
supermakets
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supermarkets
and increasing the prices of
fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
will probably help to tackle
this
issue. In conclusion, I personally agree that increasing outdoor facilities will massively improve public
health
, but I
also
think that other alternatives should be taken into
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such
as a good diet and a healthy social environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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