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Some people are of the opinion that food should be transported from one place to the other, while others are of the opinion that people should consume locally produced food. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

It is often seen nowadays that
food
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 is transported over enormous distances from farm owners to customers. Few
people
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 are of the opinion that, to conserve nature and make it pocket friendly, it would be better to eat
food
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 grown nearby.
This
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 trend has its own benefits
such
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 as
cost saving
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 but it
also
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 has drawbacks like
unavailability
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the unavailability
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 of certain specific
food
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 variety. While I accept that the trend has its own merits, but the demerits are far more. There are 2 major advantages.
Firstly
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, the
food
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 grown nearby will need minimum expenses on transport. To be clearer, the money needed for vehicles, fuel and
labor
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 will be saved resulting in decreased prices.
Secondly
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, the
food
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 prepared locally will take into consideration the choices of the
people
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 staying there. To give an example, in
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the case
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 of
Jain
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the Jain
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 community, there is no point in growing unnecessary items
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that
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 are not consumed by them.
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 will save resources and decrease wastage.
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, there are three distinct disadvantages.
To begin
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 with, certain
food
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 which
are
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 needed in daily diet cannot be made available.
For example
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sea
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seafood
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food
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 will not be available in hilly areas resulting in
people
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 being deprived of the delicacies. Another thing to consider is, not all plants will grow everywhere. To elaborate, rice cannot be cultivated in Jaipur.
People
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 cannot miss these basic elements in their conventional meals.
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, in today’s era,
people
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 have fallen into
a
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 habit of getting whatever they want. If they are forced to eat what is being made available locally, there will be mental agony and disharmony. To conclude, after considering
above
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the above
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 explanation, there are pros and cons of eating
food
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 grown locally.
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, in my perception, I truly feel that the disadvantages outnumber the advantages.

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