Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

More and more people are committing crimes in the current days. According to
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, some people say that giving heavy
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others assume that there is another way to decrease it. In my opinion, I tend to agree with having another way to decline it. In
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of all, people who mention having heavy
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duties think that it is the only way criminals reflect their sin.
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is because it is believed that taking a long time can reflect their sin and it is enabled to come back to society.
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penalty is one of the factors which is longer
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duties. The reason is that abolish of
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penalty around the world, some citizens say that criminals should spend whole lives compensating their sins to victims and victims' families.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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