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Fewer and fewer children are willing to look after their parents as they get older these days. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

#children #parents #trend
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 youths are ready to take care of their
parents
 than before.
While
 a group support it to spend more time concentrating on their jobs, others including me, disapprove and fear the emotional pain on the whole family. I believe
this
 trend has more drawbacks than benefits. On
one
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 hand, not looking after
parents
 has minor advantages. Some youths choose not to be caregivers for their
parents
 because they find
this
 responsibility
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an overwhelming obligation they can not endure.
Thus
, a significant number of youths prefer to hire professional help to take care of their
parents
 or put them in senior houses.
Consequently
, they have time to focus on their career,
while
 the
parents
 are getting a professional level of help. To illustrate, new nursing houses are opening recently offering multiple facilities to entertain the senior guests all day long.
This
 type of
houses
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 is becoming so popular because of
its
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 positive effects they have on the morality of guests.
On the Other hand
, there are serious disadvantages of not taking care of
parents
.
Firstly
, the
parents
 feel abandoned by their children, which in
return
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 makes them depressed. A second disadvantage is that children lose their connections with their
family
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;
hence
, they live a life with no emotional support.
As a result
, both
parents
 and children suffer emotionally.
Furthermore
, the second generation deprives themselves
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 the rich experience the older generation transmits to them. A clear example is some family businesses that
close
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 their doors after the death of their founders, and
that is
 because the heirs did not carry the knowledge and wisdom of their
parents
.
To conclude
, in my opinion, the disadvantages of not looking after the
parents
 outweigh the advantages.
That is
 because saving time for career improvement should not be used as an argument to neglect the
parents
.
Moreover
, both parties are negatively affected by the trend.
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task response
The essay addresses the topic but lacks depth and clarity in discussing the advantages and disadvantages of children not looking after their parents.
coherence and cohesion
The essay uses cohesive devices to connect ideas, but the overall progression of ideas and arguments could be improved for better coherence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Generational dynamics
  • Elderly care
  • Filial piety
  • Professional care services
  • Psychological well-being
  • Social responsibility
  • Financial burden
  • Emotional strain
  • Nuclear family
  • Assisted living
  • Health care systems
  • Social norms
  • Dependency ratio
  • Aging population
  • Cultural values
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