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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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crimes
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 are committed by youngsters all over the globe. There are many causes behind
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 negative development and there are
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 a
lot
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 of methods to tackle the issue. Behind
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 movement lie a
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 of reasons.
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 with, with the introduction of the Internet, teenagers are more vulnerable to inappropriate
information
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.
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, on social media platforms
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 as Facebook, many posts related to violence and sexual content every day.
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amount
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 of stress students are having from schools, they can
be easily influence
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 by any external factors,
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 as
information
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 and movies. To give an example, watching a violent film can encourage teenagers to commit
crimes
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,
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 as motor racing. The governments can apply different ways to deal with the problem.
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, by blocking some websites that can encourage youth
crimes
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, the rate can go down. To illustrate, a
lot
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 of websites in my country is prohibited because they contain unsuitable
information
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.
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, governments can
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 spend more
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 education to teach youngsters that committing
crimes
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 are bad and
dishonorable
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dishonourable
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.
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, my school has organized a
lot
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 of programs to educate us that we must not commit
crimes
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. In summary, crime rates among teenagers are rising due to access to websites containing violence and inappropriate
information
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, and the issue can be dealt with through the prohibition put on unsuitable sites and more educational programs.
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Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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