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Some people believe advertisements have positive effect on people and business while others do not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Advertisements
 have proved to be one of the best methods to grab the attention of a target audience. It effectively influences the human mind and has become a way to propagate products or just call
people
 to some action. While it is commonly believed
this
 is a positive trend, I think
advertisements
 may propagate unhealthy lifestyle and serve as a reason for monopoly in a market. The reason why the usage of
advertisements
 may seem like an appealing option is that they help businesses to boost their sales. The majority of goods shown on TV have a huge potential of gaining the popularity of a consumer community.
Hence
, companies increasingly employ
this
 opportunity to encourage
people
 to purchase their products. On contrary to
this
,
advertisements
 tend to lead society into unhealthy life. Drinks and food showed on TV often contain harmful ingredients for health,
however
,
people
 are easily fooled by their eye-catching presentation.
As a result
, they poison their health, spending money at the same time.
Moreover
,
advertisements
 frequently result in a monopoly in a particular industry.
For example
, shampoo company may overpopulate TV with their
advertisements
, grabbing the majority of a target audience of an industry. As a consequence, consumers will unconsciously become loyal to a particular brand and businesses which cannot afford
advertisements
 may fall out. To conclude,
although
 I believe that
advertisements
 might prove to be an effective tool in hands of businesses, I
also
 consider that they can harm sales of other companies and may encourage
people
 to move to an unhealthy life.
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