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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You recently went on a business trip to another country and you faced an issue at the airport. Write a letter to the airport management and include ● what the details of your flight were. ● what the problem at the airport was. ● some suggestions for improvement.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about the problem
occurred
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that occurred
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 recently,
while
traveling
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travelling
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 from Abu Dhabi International Airport. I was
traveling
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travelling
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through
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on
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 a business class ticket
of
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on
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 Etihad Airways, flight number EY223 on
16tth
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16th
 April 2021 at 3.00 pm from Abu Dhabi to Frankfurt. I was waiting for my flight in the premium lounge in front of gate no 23, where I paid
$
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a $
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99 entry
fees
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fee
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 but sadly the internet services were not working inside the lounge and I came to know that it
is being
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 disrupted
since
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for
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last
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the last
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one
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apply
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month. Kindly keep supervising the maintenance team and check the reports
time
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from time
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 to time. I would like to suggest
you
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that
fiber
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fibre
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 optics is better than broadband, so it will be nice to update the internet cables inside the airport as nowadays, it is necessary for everyone. I look forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully Vishal
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coherence cohesion
The letter adequately covers the required details of the flight and the problem at the airport. However, it could benefit from a more structured approach, with clear topic sentences introducing each paragraph and a consistent use of linking words and phrases to enhance coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The response addresses the key points required in the prompt but lacks a formal and suitable writing tone. The greeting and closing are appropriate, but the overall tone could be more professional.
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