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An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. what problem does this cause? what can be done to deal with this situation?

#professionals #doctors #teachers #countries #work #situation
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specialist
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such
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 as teaching professionals and doctors, engineers are moving from their native to developed
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 to work .
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the main problems associated with
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 transition and suggest a viable solution.
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 , the skilled
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people
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 are moving to work and live in developed
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, because they are earning
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 salary and decent
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 which is not able to
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by the poorer
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 it will create a massive shortage of skilled
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 . these factors might create
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 extensive impact
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 economic growth, and
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 are forcing to travel to other
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 in order to get sensitive medical treatment .
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 month one private television channel conducted one survey, its saying that
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 are travelling to Singapore, America, and U.k for treatment
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 issues, which will make trouble to them mentally and financially.
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ready to invest
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under developed
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countries
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 of
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 professionals. A solution to
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 problem is government should fix the high pay scale
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skilled professionals
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 as teachers, doctors and engineers.
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 to that government can give free standard education and medical support to their family members.
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, one latest news survey report saying that Australia, Canada, and New Zealand
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 are providing free education and free medical to the
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. So limited
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 only migrating to other
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 these
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 are growing massively.
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 these
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 giving permanent residence to other country skilled
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 in order to develop their
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 among the world. To conclude, in my opinion
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 should make strong policies and plans to stop the skills
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migrating
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from migrating
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 from their own
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 .
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life style
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lifestyle
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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