The use of recreational drugs is on the increase, especially among young people. Describe the reasons for this worrying issue and provide suggestions to minimize it.

Nowadays,
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teenagers and adults are taking
drugs
as a passion and
habits
,
this
problem is becoming deteriorating. The pros and cons
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it are mentioned below. In
this
modern era,
people
are becoming very advanced and updating themselves day by day. There are many reasons about
people
are doing bad
habits
like
drugs
, smoking , and many more. The
first
reason is,
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days
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young
people
are living
very
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modern life. They are enjoying all the moments of life but at some
extect
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extent
few persons getting
stress
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at all the moment which habit makes
then
sad and lonely.
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survey which was conducted by google, 70%
citizens
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are adopting
wrost
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worst
habits
like
drugs
due to their breakup with their partner and some are for their works and home stress.
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, the
second
reason is, some bad humans
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to spread nuisance in
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due to their bad
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purpose
they
are try
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to convince youngers and giving them
drugs
and doing bad works with them helps.
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year times of
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make a survey and in that they proved that
,
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60% to 70% nuisance is spreading by youngers in all the
nation
.
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problem is becoming
a
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huge so
this
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days government and some charities are taking steps about to
deacrease
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decrease
it. The government is doing lots of work on it like advertising good
mesaage
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message
about it in television
then
strictly taking steps if someone is kept with
drugs
in
nation
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and
also
check all the tourists which one is coming from
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of the country. While
,
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numbers of
organisation
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is
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also
activate to minimise the ratio of
people
who takes
drugs
.
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,
this
type of groups
are
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spread
news
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in
nation
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to take awareness about it.
Also
, they have
introduce
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some doctors helps who want to come back from
this
type of bad
habits
. In my opinion,
this
problem is very dangerous and citizens should not try
this
type of intoxic
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products
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on their body very badly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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