The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

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they may become the victim of many health disorder one of the most prominent is obesity.

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of things are involved in the problem. Due to the changing lifestyle of the

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they may indulge in many bad works.

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and they can't able to control being fat. Eating unhealthy may rise to obesity.

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who use to eat unhealthy food daily. Almost 90%of youngsters eating street food which directly affects their health.

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, sitting for long hours is another the most detrimental cause of

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use to see the television and by using

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their health. Moving

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, by using mobile phones for long hours their lifestyle will totally change. Their studying habits are devastating. They are not able to concentrate on their studies

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they will have to face failure in their assignments. Due to

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they can't able to wear

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has to go somewhere on any

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by watching other people clothes and

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demotivated owing to suicide etc. To summarise, one should take care of their living standard and he should consume things in

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a way that it will not create any bad effects because excess of everything is bad.

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In many parts of the world, women study science and technology, but donot work in these fields. What measures can be taken to encourage women to work in science and technology?

Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to imporse a higher tax on this kind of food. TO what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?