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Nowadays anyone can post news on the internet. As a result we cannot trust the information we read there. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#anyone #post #news #internet #trust #information
In
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 contemporary era, the advancement of technology played
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 role in human society. One of major technique which is highly used by
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 majority of humans in the current scenario is
internet
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the internet
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 which
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 effective resources and has globally released many useful
informations
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pieces of information
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 on the social
media
 for
people
 development. Somehow it
also
 shows false news which
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 less trustworthy
amongest
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amongst
 the
people
. I am in complete accord with the given notion and the reasons for my opinion will be elucidated in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are numerous reasons to
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this
 ideology.
First
 and
formost
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foremost
for most
,
information
 on the
media
 is not always reliable because they have several resources on
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social
media
 which adds
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 of reviews on the same subject. To explicate, social bloggers who use their personal accounts
such
 as on
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Facebook
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 and
instagram
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Instagram
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 to
post
 relative
information
 on
famous
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the famous
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 topic, which varies data on
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the same
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 subject. For exemplify, according to
survey
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a survey
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 conducted by American University in 2019, 85% of American faced the problem of
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asthma
 due to following the diet schedule from
internet
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the internet
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. Thereby, it can be seen from
this
 point that wrong
information
 on social
media
 may mislead
person's
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 activity.
In addition
 to
this
, another major factor which proves that individual cannot
merly
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merely
 rely on world wide web is
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 amount of users on youtube, attracts
people
 towards their page. To explain, more number of
youtubers
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YouTubers
post
 details just to lead the interest of
vast
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 majority of
people
, misleads their thought by giving unreliable
information
.
For instance
, as per recent research done by
Indian
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 newspaper "The Hindu", youtube page. millions of mature beings failed in their competitive examination by following the data of
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the internet
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. To conclude, owing to reasons
such
 as
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 of social
media
 pages with different thoughts and unsaturated data
post
 by
youtubers
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YouTubers
 lessen the trust of
people
 which may
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detrimental
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 role in
individual's
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 life, I
am completely agree
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 with
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a given
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 ideology which states that anybody can
post
 news on the
internet
 which may be deceitful.
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  • secondly
  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Credibility
  • Verification
  • Misinformation
  • Disinformation
  • Journalistic standards
  • Algorithm
  • Engagement
  • Source discernment
  • Anonymity
  • Traditional news outlets
  • AI and machine learning
  • Reliable sources
  • Unverified information
  • Amplification
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