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Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. what are the problems of this? Suggest some solutions.

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The
work life
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work-life
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 balance for modern society is becoming an unachievable task even after putting more efforts
towards
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 it.
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,
this
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 circumstances are less quality
time
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 with family and health issues and
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 it will argue that decreasing the number of working
hours
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 and doing regular exercise are the most viable solutions.
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 with, the predominant issue caused by imbalance life-work activity is that there is less
time
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 for family members. Most
of
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employees
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the employees
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 are spending 10 to 11
hours
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 in their workplaces and
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 at
commute
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the commute
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.
As a result
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, their family bonds become weaker and might be the cause of separation of divorce in couples.
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, a survey conducted recently by BBC News has revealed that more than 33% of the world's newly married couples have filed their divorce cases due to spend less quality
time
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 together.
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, several
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 and health diseases
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a
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fatigue, strain, obesity, high Cholesterol and so forth are generally developed in today's human.
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, they unable to give sufficient progress in their work.
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, because of hectic
schedule
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 many workers are unsuccessful to achieve suitable home and office environment.
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, a myriad of effective solutions can be employed to mitigate these problems.
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, the office
hours
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 should be limited by the employer
instead
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 of long
hours
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.
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, employees will be able to
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join
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joint
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join
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 their family
little
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 early in the evening to spend
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time
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 with them.
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, to avoid any kind of unpleasant unhealthy condition people should join gyms or
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take part in social activities.
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, it will help to release stress and provide
required
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the required
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 energy to
body
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the body
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.
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, American researchers found that many entrepreneurs are interested to go on
long
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the long
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 drive to get relaxation.
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, quality
time
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 for themselves and others might be
best
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the best
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 remedies. To conclude, imbalance work-life can be the cause of
destruction
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the destruction
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 of personal life in different
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ways
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was
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.
However
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, spending less
time
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 at offices and
also
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 giving priority to health and family can be the most productive measures to solve these problems.

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