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Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #leaders #leadership #skills
It takes many years to become a good leader .It is of no doubt the
people
 who step up in the politics are a mentor to many of the
people
 in the
nation
.It is true that
leaders
 have the skill set which
influence
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 masses of
people
.The technique of influencing a large group of
people
 could be inbuilt or some might have learnt in
there
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 span of life.Let us delve deeper in the upcoming paragraph to discuss
about
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the views the
leaders
 incurred the skills to motivate
people
. It is undeniable that some
people
 are born
leaders
.Some are born with a silver spoon as the leadership runs in the family.It is genetically
there
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 forefathers were the rulers and it passes through the generation.
For example
,the king of Saudi Arabia has received
throne
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 from his father and is an energetic ,
a
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 very influential man who has brought prosper and various big projects to helped its
nation
 to achieve great heights.
Hence
,he is
an
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 natural born leader with
a
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 traits of how to run a
nation
 smoothly.
On the other hand
,some
people
 spend ages to reach a top position in the political party.These
people
 learn with the span of time by getting a training program.The training includes learning
range
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 of words from different languages
such
 as how to greet
people
.
Hence
,they improve
there
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 lexical resources and get
a
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training
of
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 how to interact
among
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the
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society while travelling to various regions of the
nation
.
Moreover
,they grasp knowledge about different states festivals,
there
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 customs and traditions and
therefore
 they show cast themselves according to the area when they are there for
an
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 speech.
Furthermore
,a person with
an
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 good academic education ,a vast
in depth
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 knowledge of various fields make a person better to represent the
nation
.As Bhim Rao
Ambekar
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Ambedkar
 ,
a
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 another great
representator
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representation
representative
 who had attained five degrees and was given the privilege to
wrote
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 the constitution of India. In
an
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 nutshell,I believe that
people
 leadership should be on the basis of
there
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their
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 education,social work and there work of practice they have done in
there
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their
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 life.Some nations
has
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 uneducated
leaders
 just they train themselves prior and represent as a
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well
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 wishers of the society.
Therefore
 ,these fake leader could
be refrained
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 and a
hardworker
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hard worker
, empathetic should become the face of
the
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society.
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