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Nowadays football supporters behave violently. What is the cause? How can we solve it?

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soccers is most popular sports in
european
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 countries and it is admired widespread across the globe. it has
huge
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 fan following and
people
 feel attached to it. in recent times
every day
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 life is filled with frustration, anxiety and anger which lead to some violence in
soccer
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a soccer
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stadium
.
winner
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the winner
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 celebrates and the losser gets
frustated
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frustrated
 in most cases money matter is involved in the form of
match fixing
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 . here we are going have look
on
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 some of
positive
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the positive
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 and negative effects
on
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paticular
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particular
 played
sport
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soccer
.
sometime
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people
 behave in
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exceptional
expectional
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an expectional
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 manner which is quite rude and fearsome to other
people
.
soccer
 a game in which
alot
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a lot
 of wealth is involved and
infact
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in fact
 personal feelings too. performing
of
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apply
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soccer
 teams affect
people
most
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 because of their
such
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apply
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close interaction with it. the other crucial factor is money
people
 bet on their favourite teams to make many and
sometime
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 it goes
upto
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up to
 as high as millions. with the team condition and match predictable
last
 minute is
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an
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accurate time where frustration is seen .
solution
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the solution
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 to
this
 new problem lies in
soccer
 itself , rules should be made to restrict prohibit
people
 from betting or match-fixing.
stadium
 instruction should be conveyed to
people
 to behave in a more civilised manner. drinks containing alcohol should immediately be banned
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in
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stadium
 premises. provoking language
ang
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and
 signs should not be permitted . enjoy
game
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the game
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 and let others enjoy should be
logo
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the logo
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 of
stadium
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the stadium
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.
for
instance
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,instance
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 old
soccer
 fan was beaten up by
the
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a
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 group of young students because he protested against their bad language and
alchol
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alcohol
consumpyion
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consumption
in
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 the premises.
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