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the number of local and international students' admission in Australian universities over a time period of 10 years.

#students #admission #australian #universities #time #period #years
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The given graphs illustrate the
number
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 of local and international
students
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' admission to Australian universities over a time period of 10 years. overall, it is clear that
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 total enrolments of international
students
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 rose continuously, the
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 of local
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 remained constant after a certain period of time.
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, there was no significant difference between enrolled commencing pupils. In terms of overseas
students
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, the total
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 increased from 20000 in the year 2001 to more than 80000 in the year 2010, while in 2001, commencing
students
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 were around 12000, they were just above 40000 in 2010, and
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 figure was almost half as compared to whole strength. In the case of local
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, in 2001, they were 400,000 in total, and reached more than 600,000, but gained plateau stage afterwards.
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, the
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 of commencing
students
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 were far less than the total
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, and it was below 200,000 in 2001, which grown just up to slightly more than 200,000.
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