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Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extend to you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #food #population #import
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Many folks think that nations should manufacture
food
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 for their own inhabitants and import less
food
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 as possible. I totally agree with
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 notion.
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 essay will articulate all the possible views along with my perception. To commence with, many countries are independent in their
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production
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.
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, India ranks highest in the
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 of rice.
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 for rice distribution, India is efficient to supply rice to the people. It is important to give more importance to the growth of
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production
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 in their own country. Because self-
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production production
 of
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 encourages economic growth.
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, due to more
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 of
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 export trade will enhance which helps to improve the nation's economy.
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, there will more agriculture jobs available for locals.
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, when a nation become self-independent in
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production
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, there will less cost to be spent on imported goods.
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, some people argue that
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 not all lands are perfect for cultivating
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good quality
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.
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 import of some goods is essential. If every country stops trading
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 and start doing self-
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production production
production reduction
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 the international
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 economy will diminish soon. To conclude, in my opinion,
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 trade should be done as little as possible and every nation should become independent by producing their own
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. It helps in economic growth and
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 easily accessible for people to grow foods and to distribute locally.
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