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Crimes and other kinds of information on television and newspaper have adverse consequences. This kind of information to be restricted to be shown in media. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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The rate of crimes is increasing day by day.Various types of
news
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 are broadcasting through different methods like television,newspaper and the internet.Government should take action against unusual
information
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 that the
media
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 is showing.I mentioned my points of view in the following paragraphs.
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,
media
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 plays an important role in the development of the nation.It is the only source to know about what is happening in the country.Nowadays,
crime
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 is at the peak of glory.
People
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 do lots of
crime
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 in different ways and the
media
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 provide all the
information
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 regarding the
crime
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 to society.So it has a great impact on the community.
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,youngsters learn many tips about
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 through
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social network.After watching the
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 they change their mindset and indulge in
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.
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 to
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,most of the
news
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 channels broadcast the wrong
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 to the
people
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.They just do it for earning the money.Government should make the rule regarding
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news
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.Before telecast any
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 on
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 it should pass from the sensor.If any
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 channel provides fake
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 put a heavy fine on that.
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,as the citizen of the nation,it is the responsibility of every auditor to provide the correct and perfect
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society. In conclusion,it is the responsibility of the Government as well as
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 coverage to take the action against those
people
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 who provide the wrong
information
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 to the
people
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Desensitize: To make someone less likely to feel shock or distress at scenes of cruelty or suffering by overexposure to such images.
  • Sensationalism: The use of exciting or shocking stories at the expense of accuracy, to provoke public interest or excitement.
  • Media Ethics: Principles and standards of conduct relating to the role and responsibilities of press and broadcast professionals.
  • Perception: The way in which something is regarded, understood, or interpreted.
  • Ignorance: Lack of knowledge or information.
  • Balance in Reporting: Presenting both sides of an issue or argument to provide a fair understanding.
  • Preparedness: A state of readiness, especially for unexpected events or emergencies.
  • Social Learning Theory: A theory that suggests people learn from observing others, including the behaviors, attitudes, and outcomes of those behaviors.
  • PTSD (Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder): A mental health condition triggered by experiencing or witnessing a terrifying event.
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