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Most people do not care enough about the environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #care
Many
people
 now do not concentrate on protecting the
environment
 in specific and the environmental problems in general. I totally disagree with
this
 opinion because we are living on
the
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 green earth and our responsibilities are protecting the place that we are living. The main reason why I believe the
environment
 is being injured is likely because of our indifference to the earth. To illustrate, global temperatures are climbing. Ice caps are melting. Droughts, wildfires, and super hurricanes are becoming more common. All top of that, the air quality is
also
 decreasing. Most air pollution is the result of
combustion
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 of fossil fuels to generate power and heat
,
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 and to power vehicles. Based on statistics,
people
 release that the CO2 emitted from private vehicles, public transportation are taken by almost 70%.
In addition
, pollution or other environmental issues are
also
 negatively affecting our health and life. Cancer, flood, and imbalance in biodiversity are increasing
everyday
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.
This
 is because the quality of our life is going down but the number of natural disasters
are
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 going up.
However
, there are so many solutions to overcome these problems. Everyone should act to protect our
environment
. Reforestation is one of the effective ways to save the earth. Thanks to that, the global temperatures will be stable, the ice caps will stop melting and the number of
people
 who must be evacuated because of flood will reduce.
Moreover
, to protect the air, we must end its root cause and move away from fossil fuels, replacing them with clean renewable energy. In conclusion, I do not agree that
people
 do not care about
the
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environmental problems. Given
this
 situation, it seems that everyone should contribute our small things to protect the
environment
 where we are living not only for the present but
also
 for the future.
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