In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

People
are suffering
with
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health problem due to eating too much fast
food
in some countries. Due to
this
situation
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government
has the right to impose
higher
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a higher
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tax
on that
food
. In my opinion, I agree that the
tax
for
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fast
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food
ought to be revised and by increasing the
tax
it will greatly give positive impact to lower down
people
interest eat that
food
. A good reason
a fast
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fast food
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food
should receive
the
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higher
tax
is that it will help
people
to have a lower interest to purchase
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fast
food
.
This
method will force
people
to opt
another
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alternative to eat more healthy
food
that
contain
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a
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good nutrition.
For example
, without increasing the
tax
for
the
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fast
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food
it allows
people
from
lower income
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lower-income
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family to gain
the
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junk
food
.
Hence
, increasing the
tax
is the accurate solution to be applied as it able to reduce the scale of
people
eating the
food
. Another point to consider is that the current environment of
people
life has to take into account as well since most
of
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a
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people
busy with their carrier and
time
to cook at home is lesser, so they are looking for
immediate
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approach.
For instance
, a working wife
have
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to execute various work at
office
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and do not have much
time
to having
health
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food
for
their self
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themself
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and
family
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their family
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.
On the other hand
,
Government
should play a vital role in resolving
this
issue before it
become
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more
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worse. Controlling it at
a
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initial stage will help
people
to always stay healthy all the
time
.
For example
, imposing
the
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higher
tax
to
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on
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the
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fast
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fast-food
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food
will
also
increase
government
revenue while ensuring
people
healthy. In
other word
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, both parties will acquire the benefit.
This
approach
also
capable of
to reduce
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financial support provided by a
government
to
a
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healthcare sector since most of the
time
a substantial amount of money given to that sector to take care of
people
that
having
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chronic
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disease.
Besides
that,
government
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also
ought to consider increasing or imposing
tax
advertisement for
the
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junk
food
. By doing
this
way, it will help
people
to not really influenced from the advertisement provided by a
fast
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fast-food
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food
company which usually conducted in
creative
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manner. In conclusion, fast
food
contains bad substances which can
affected
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human
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body in a long run,
hence
imposing
higher
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the higher
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tax
is
the
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apply
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one of the methods
can
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that can
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be applied by a
government
to change
people
interest
on
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in
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that
food
.
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overconsumption
  • Chronic diseases
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Sin tax
  • Subsidize
  • Affordability
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Paternalism
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Industry lobbying
  • Public health initiatives
  • Consumer behavior
  • Regulatory measures
  • Health-conscious
  • Processed foods
  • Fiscal policy
  • Preventative healthcare
  • Behavioral economics
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