In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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are suffering from
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health problems due to eating too much fast
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in some countries. Due to
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situation
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government
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has the right to impose a higher
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on that
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. In my opinion, I agree that the
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fast
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food
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ought to be revised and by increasing the
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it will greatly give positive impact to lower down
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interest eat that
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. A good reason
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food
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should receive
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higher
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is that it will help
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to have a lower interest to purchase
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fast
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.
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method will force
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to opt
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alternative to eat more healthy
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that contains
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decent nutrition.
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, without increasing the
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for
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fast
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food
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it allows
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from
lower income
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family to gain
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junk
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.
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, increasing the
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is the accurate solution to be applied as it able to reduce the scale of
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eating the
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. Another point to consider is that the current environment of
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life has to take into account as well since most of the
people
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busy with their carrier and
time
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to cook at home is lesser, so they are looking for
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approach.
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, a working wife has to execute various works at
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the office
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and did not have much
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to having
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food
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for their self and
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her family
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.
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,
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should play a vital role in resolving
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issue before it became worse. Controlling it at an initial stage will help
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to always stay healthy all the
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.
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, imposing
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higher
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to
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fast
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food
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will
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increase
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revenue while ensuring
people
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healthy.
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, both parties will acquire the benefit.
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approach
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capable of
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financial support provided by a
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to
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healthcare sector since most of the
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a substantial amount of money given to that sector to take care of
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that
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a chronic disease.
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government
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also
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ought to consider increasing or imposing
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advertisement for
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junk
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. By doing
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way, it will help
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to not so influenced
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the advertisement provided by a
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food
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company which usually conducted in a creative manner. In conclusion, fast
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contains bad substances which can
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human
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body in a long run,
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government
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must take
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precaution
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steps in imposing a
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as
higher
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a higher
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tax
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will be impacted the business while
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a lower
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tax
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result
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many
people
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takes the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overconsumption
  • Chronic diseases
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Sin tax
  • Subsidize
  • Affordability
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Paternalism
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Industry lobbying
  • Public health initiatives
  • Consumer behavior
  • Regulatory measures
  • Health-conscious
  • Processed foods
  • Fiscal policy
  • Preventative healthcare
  • Behavioral economics
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